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Dragoness Dragona [WIP]



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#21 Amore Crystal

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Posted 05 November 2015 - 12:16 AM

May I please get an analysis on Dragona? I would like more helpful criticism before I finalized her for approval.



#22 ZephyrBurst

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Posted 06 November 2015 - 05:19 AM

Personality:
Can be overprotective of her charge, the Canterlot Treasury. (Dragon Greed)

It is unknown weather her request was granted. However she did find a home near Canterlot. Currently, she is away on dragon duties in the dragon lands.

These are the only things I felt could be wrong (the 2 things in bold seem to conflict) with the character app. Other than that, it looks fine. As for criticism of the character, I've got none at this time. The app gives us a good overview of the character and what they're about.





#23 knight

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Posted 18 December 2015 - 05:22 PM

Progress..? :(



#24 Amore Crystal

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Posted 09 January 2016 - 11:56 AM

Sorry, been trying to get life straight.



#25 Amore Crystal

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Posted 09 January 2016 - 11:58 AM

Almost done.

She desires to repay her dept. So she offers herself to protect the Treasury.

She doesn't live directly in the Tresury.

I left the posability of her being denied the request there.



#26 Swaggy2554

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Posted 10 February 2016 - 07:33 AM

AWESOME! I love her!

#27 Amore Crystal

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Posted 29 February 2016 - 03:44 AM

made a few changes and added abilities. She has forms that change based on states of high emotional awareness or stress.

What do you think?



#28 knight

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Posted 28 March 2016 - 08:29 PM

She's looking good to me, though I'd like some clarification on what exactly 'Currently, she is away on dragon business.' means.

There were a couple grammatical errors, but that doesn't effect her. I'd like some detail on how she came to learn 'Arcane magic', and what you mean by it exactly.

Also, please clarify who she is indebted to and why, and what castle she is protecting, and from whom?

Just try to tie her a little more into Equestria lore so she fits into the pony world, even if she doesn't have direct interaction with ponies yet. :)



#29 Amore Crystal

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Posted 30 March 2016 - 12:35 AM

Thanks. I will.



#30 Amore Crystal

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Posted 29 April 2017 - 02:47 AM

On the away part, dragon business just means the next dragon migration. She looking for a potential partner. However, she is unlikely to find such for the migration.

Dragons like her are like sorcerers. They learn magic naturally and it can be discovered in any number of ways.

I left who out so that it doesn't connect directly with cannon. But she feels like she owes a debt to Equestria and its Crown royals for what they did for her.

Also, she isn't guarding a castle just the treasury of Equestria in Canterlot. However, I did also leave it open that she can be denied her request. If denied she would ask how she could help and would be willing to do almost anything to feel as if she has repaid her life debt to the crown and kingdom.







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